Just finished writing my first short story and I'm really happy with myself. :)
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Hello, everyone.<br><br>I just finished writing my first ever short story. I'm not sure what to consider it (magical realism? Some sort of fairy tale?) but I'm really, really happy with it. All the ideas just flowed into my head at once and I wrote it in maybe 30 minutes.<br><br>I've always been terrible at writing and I just thought I wasn't cut out for it, but now I feel inspired to write more. I'm not sure if it's good quality or not, but I think it's sweet. What do you guys think? I'm excited to share it with you all.<br><br>The moon was a large stone dropped from the heavens. It fell with an enormous crash into the middle of the ocean, where it bobbed and rested in the water.<br><br>The humans on land were amazed by the bright beauty of the moon, and everyone seemed to love it. The people in the cities would gaze at the moon in awe as they left their offices and walked to their cars to go home. The farmers far out in the country would look to the moon for its floods of light as they walked through the fields to check on their crops.<br><br>But the humans in the ocean didn't like the moon. They had lived there for centuries, even longer than anyone knew, and they were happy with their little houses that they had built out of coral and shells and fish bones. They had schools and a hospital, a church and a grocery store.<br><br>One day the moon was dropped into their ocean, and all of their homes were destroyed. All of the houses were crushed, everyone's belongings were lost, and some of the people were even killed. The survivors had to live in the church with no knowledge of what had happened or how it happened.<br><br>But they knew whoever dropped the moon into their ocean and destroyed their entire world lived up in the heavens. And soon enough, the humans up in the heavens came from the stars to visit the moon. They stepped out of their strange vehicles in big suits, and smiled at each other and hugged each other and cried. They planted a flag on the moon, which bobbed happily.<br><br>The humans in the ocean were furious. The heavens humans had destroyed their world and killed their friends and family, and they hadn't even apologized. The heavens humans didn't even seem to know they existed. But what could they do? They just watched the heavens humans from a distance, fuming with anger.<br><br>One young girl, a little mermaid who had always been very adventurous, had an idea. She swam up to the heavens humans and said hello.<br><br>"What!?" cried the heavens humans. "This is impossible. How are you talking?"<br><br>"I don't know," said the little girl. "Why did you drop a huge rock into our ocean?"<br><br>The heavens humans were amazed. They had never seen a fish that could talk before and they didn't know what to do. They took the little mermaid into their strange vehicle and pressed buttons and prodded her with objects until she cried out in pain.<br><br>"Why are you being so mean?" she asked them. "You already destroyed our homes. Do you have to hurt me as well?"<br><br>The heavens humans didn't answer her. They seemed to not care about her question, and continued to prod her and ask her more questions. But one of them, a kind-looking old man, seemed to be remorseful. He looked at the little mermaid sadly, but did nothing.<br><br>The heavens humans dropped the little girl back into the ocean. She swam back to the church where her people were living, and told them what had happened. The people were so upset they didn't know what to do. They didn't die, of course, since they were magical ocean humans, but they were throbbing and aching from the pain of the little mermaid, who was their dear friend.<br><br>The next day, the heavens humans came again. They were angry now and held weapons. The ocean humans didn't know what they were or what they could do, but they were very afraid. But somehow, the heavens humans seemed to have forgotten about the little mermaid. They looked around and around, but none of them could find her.<br><br>Finally, one of the heavens humans saw her. "I found her!" she cried, and the other heavens humans cheered.<br><br>"I don't know what to do now," said the little mermaid. "I told you people not to come back."<br><br>The heavens humans ignored her and ran towards her. The little mermaid lifted her arms and, with a wave, she pushed the moon towards the heavens humans. It crashed into their vehicle, killing them instantly.<br><br>The heavens humans fell into the water, where the ocean humans got their revenge. They took the humans' bodies and prodded them with objects, hurt them, and repeatedly asked them why they had dropped the huge rock into their ocean. The heavens humans could not answer, since they were dead.<br><br>And so the ocean humans were happy again. The little mermaid had saved them and given them justice. In celebration, she swam to the surface of the water so that she could look at the heavens and smile. She saw the humans in the cities staring at the moon in awe, and the farmers in the country using the moon for light.<br><br>"You humans don't know what we did to the humans that came to visit the moon," said the little mermaid. "And you never will."<br><br>And with that, she swam back down into the water.
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