What do you think of this?

This was a piece of a project that I got bad marks on. I'd like to know your thoughts on it. It's a simple poem, so I'll just post it here.<br><br>In the desert, where the sand and the wind fall<br><br>A dream is born, it grows, it dies<br><br>In the desert, where the sand and the wind fall<br><br>A dream is born, it grows, it dies<br><br>For I was that dream, dropped, forsaken, lost<br><br>And now I’ve grown, and now I am dead<br><br>And now I am a dream lost<br><br>So now, I’m just the sand and the wind<br><br>Lost again and again and again<br><br>And now, I’m just the sand and the wind<br><br>Lost again and again and again<br><br>So my life was useless and my dreams were all mistakes<br><br>My life was useless, and my dreams were all mistakes<br><br>So I look at you, and I look at me<br><br>I look at you, and I look at me<br><br>What do you see?<br><br>What do you see?<br><br>What do you see?<br><br>What do you see?<br><br>What do you see?<br><br>What do you see?<br><br>What do you see?<br><br>What do you see?<br><br>What do you see?<br><br>What do you see?<br><br>What do you see?<br><br>What do you see?<br><br>So my life was useless and my dreams were all mistakes<br><br>My life was useless, and my dreams were all mistakes<br><br>So my life was useless and my dreams were all mistakes<br><br>My life was useless, and my dreams were all mistakes<br><br>So my life was useless and my dreams were all mistakes<br><br>My life was useless, and my dreams were all mistakes<br><br>So gotta get past this, and head to the next land<br><br>So gotta get past this, and head to the next land<br><br>So gotta get past this, and head to the next land<br><br>So gotta get past this, and head to the next land<br><br>So gotta get past this, and head to the next land<br><br>So gotta get past this, and head to the next land<br><br>So my life was useless and my dreams were all mistakes<br><br>My life was useless, and my dreams were all mistakes<br><br>So my life was useless and my dreams were all mistakes<br><br>My life was useless, and my dreams were all mistakes<br><br>So my life was useless and my dreams were all mistakes<br><br>My life was useless, and my dreams were all mistakes