This is why I can't stand younger generations

This is from a 6th grade "Writing Workshop" assignment. This is what we call "a first draft". My directions are to edit and revise but I thought you guys would enjoy this one. She's a very sweet girl. And yes, I did die a little inside when I read this. I know this isn't the norm for 6th graders but still. This is why I have a huge problem with iPads and cell phones in schools.<br><br>Edit: This isn't my entire class. I have 4 classes of Language Arts and only two are "Developmental". In other words, they're on a 4th grade level so editing and revising is a little harder for them. I have this girl paired with a "buddy" who is very smart and writes fabulously so she's working on it now.