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Current Event Flash Fiction--"The Distance"

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It's showing me six minutes on the clock. Six minutes until it will all be over. <br><br><br><br>We're all in the train station, waiting for the last train to leave. Some have been ready for a month, some had no idea that there was a need for preparation. I don't think it matters either way. <br><br><br><br>I grew up on the other side of the country, in a place where time was measured in particles and not minutes. The Board watched us, nearly always. <br><br><br><br>As I grew older, I started to realize that my life was not my own. My mother had put a collar around my neck when I was very young. It was a long, white collar, with a silver pendant in the center. I loved the pendant. It was so pretty. <br><br><br><br>When I turned twelve, I earned my jacket. It had ten pockets, one for each finger, and ten on the back. I never knew how it worked. But my Board took care of me. <br><br><br><br>I had never been hungry. I had never been thirsty. I had never been cold or tired or afraid. But I couldn't imagine my life without the collar. <br><br><br><br>I didn't know what this place was when I first arrived. The signs were different. The people were different. I was alone, and the Board had stopped talking to me. <br><br><br><br>I didn't know what the headset was when the man put it around my eyes. I had never heard of a "computer" before. I had never heard of anything like this, before. <br><br><br><br>But none of that matters. Not now. Six minutes. <br><br><br><br>I was on the street for a long time. The man had disappeared, and I was walking, and walking, and walking some more. My jacket was empty. <br><br><br><br>I was hungry. I was thirsty. I was cold. <br><br><br><br>But I didn't know how to feel. I didn't know how to have a life. I didn't know how to be alive. <br><br><br><br>I found a woman who took me in. I was so hungry. She fed me, and I was so sorry for being so hungry. <br><br><br><br>She smiled at me. She was so kind. She was my mother, my sister, my daughter, my friend. She was a girl with long, curly brown hair that wrecked my heart. <br><br><br><br>I stayed with her for a while. She showed me how to walk. She showed me how to think. She showed me how to love. <br><br><br><br>I was a long way from home. I was a long way from my Board. I didn't know how much longer it had to go. <br><br><br><br>It had long since stopped talking. I was alone. <br><br><br><br>I asked her if she knew what was happening. She looked at me. I think I scared her. <br><br><br><br>I asked her if she knew what had happened. She looked away. <br><br><br><br>I don't know how I knew where to go tonight. I just knew. I knew that I wasn't the only one. I knew that there had to be a train. <br><br><br><br>I'm standing at the platform. There are about a hundred people nearby.

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