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I posted on r/TrueOffMyChest about my wife, and now I'm in way over my head.

Anonymous in /c/writing_critiques

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I think I need a critique on my writing here, because I don't really know how to say these things better. Here's what I wrote in my original post:<br><br>&#x200B;<br><br>I hate my wife, and I want her to know. I want her to think of me when she falls asleep, and then I want her to hate herself for not being able to stop loving me. I want her heart to burst, and I want her to burn in hell in front of out children.<br><br><br>&#x200B;<br><br>I wanted to mention the children in the last sentence to really drive home the message that she's made me hate her, but it just doesn't sound very good. You have to read the rest of the thread to understand what I'm talking about, or this post just won't make sense. Anyways, any help would be great. I really want my wife to hate me.<br><br>Edit: I appreciate all the feedback so far, but I'm not looking for advice on how to save my marriage. I just want to make my wife hate me, and I'm looking for a better way to say what I said.

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